
I succumbed to the temptation to sneak a peek and satisfy my curiosity. I immediately rose from my bed and rushed to the window. I gingerly drew the curtains, just enough to see the street and the townhouses right in front. I didn’t know what to expect when I made a cursory search of the street, only dimly lit by the few street lamps. From the search I derived that the cry hadn’t come from the street. I surmised that the shriek had come from the town house directly in front of mine. With no one awake to corroborate what I had heard, I decided to only alert the police of a suspicion of foul play. I thought again to that horrendous scream. I must endeavor to give the police every detail in order to save the old man...if it wasn't too late already.
I love how you wrote the story, especially from the perspective of the witness. It creates a mind movie. Great job!
ReplyDeleteWow good job! I liked how you used each word correctly and you took the story step-by-step and kept the story vivid. Great story!
ReplyDeletewow, i hope this didn't happen in real life.
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