Monday, April 18, 2011

Silver Lining—Benjamin Moore 2119-60


Gazing out the window,
pondering the outside.
The nighttime sky
silent,
somber.
Idle
and waiting for her.

The moon hangs low in the sky;
It's ripe with mysterious milky light.
So close
her fingers seem like they could dance upon its surface.

She fingers the silver window pane.
Forbidden to break through,
for the horrors that would await her if she
dared
go out.

Her hands
longingly linger
at the hinges.
The entire world at her fingertips
only separated by a
thin sheet of glass.

She is trapped by the impending walls of
fear.

Her outside world
existing only
when laced with the silver lining of the window pane.

She smiles to herself
there's a silver lining for her...

but

what about the outside looking in?

Perplexed and
realizing that
the world sees her
through a dirty window
of an
unimportant
unnoticed
apartment.

Isn't there any worth in me?
She pondered.

Where is my silver lining?

21 comments:

  1. Nice poem!! I love how the story behind it, Great job!! :P

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  2. Great use of alliteration in your poem. As ever so often in recent times, you've been able to take an idea from absolutely nothing and turn it into a great piece of work.

    Now to make fun of the lack of logic in it.
    Ok, so if she's APPARENTLY trapped in the damn room then why the hell would the people keeping her there give her a WINDOW. That makes no sense whatsoever.
    I mean if she saw someone wouldn't she franticly hit on the windows to signal that she's trapped? Sure, "unimporant, unnoticed" apartment yea ok, but really. If you see some girl trapped up there EVERY day wouldnt you get suspicious???

    Either way, love your work(amongst other things) and keep up the great writing(amongst other things)

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  3. Oh yeah, and don't worry, I still love you despite your lack of common sense and/or logic. In fact, the non existence of the two might be the cause of our existence.

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  4. WOW.. I did mention in science that you are really smart right? Well you can just tell by reading this amazing poem

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  5. Great use of alliteration and imagery!
    Keep up the good work;).

    PS: Nicholas, you guys sound like an old married couple. :D

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  6. very good poem and i agree with anna's comment and i like the alliteration in the beginning

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  7. Nicholas just wants to poke holes in a good poem because if he can't find anything to point out then he has to make something up in order to make it seem like it's not as good as it actually is. He's just bitter because he'll never live down " 'Cough, cough,' I coughed."

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  8. Oh please, that was 6th grade.
    Dont judge me! :(

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  10. Camilaa! great poem, i loved it. I loved that you used a lot of imagery. great job! :D

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  11. Nicholas, Maybe I'll edit my so called "lack of logic" when you learn to spell "editing" correctly.

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  12. Nicholas' comment, before he deleted it, read: "But seriously though. Good poem but some 10 second edting would make it a 1000x better?"

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  13. Shut up! My fail spelling doesn't mean your story makes any more sense.


    Besides, don't bring up the 6th grade thing, it hurts me feelings(and pride).

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  14. My story does make sense. What doesn't sense is your spelling and lack of grammar. Wouldn't you have to have some pride for me to able able to hurt it? "Snicker, snicker," she snickered. All things considered, I guess you're not THAT bad. ;)

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  15. Yes, you are very able able to hurt it :P
    And I think I'm a little better than "not THAT bad. ;)"

    Haha, dont you love it when people make mistakes when they critize your grammar?

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  16. At least I'm mature enough to admit my mistake instead of deleting the comment to hide my shame.

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  17. I was amazed by how great this poem is! Just pefect:) GREAT job:D!

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  18. your who's smarter "fight" with nicholas was feisty, LOL.

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  19. Mature enough to decide to broadcast someone elses mistake to the entire class in the most sassy, sarcastic way possible. I'll never live that down.

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  20. Great poem Camila! I love the imagery of it and all the poetic devices you used!! Wow... not only Camila's poem is enjoyable to read, but these comments sure make me laugh! ;)

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  21. Great poem Camila! I like how you used imagery :D

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